Talk:PetalTale/@comment-26273552-20161121124653

 Rating as requested 

Writing : ★★★★★ Length : ★★★★* Format : ★★★★☆ Design: ★★★★★ Final Notes:
 * VERY good writing in here. Only a couple of gramatical errors:
 * "She is one of the four characters in the final run of the Arc whom tried to attack Flowey and stop them from taking the Souls." - "whom" should actually be "who" here
 * "they are unheard of until the very last chapter, but there is frequent talk about them." - Contradictory statements. Try "they go unseen until the very last chapter"
 * Great length for reading, but just a tad long. By the time I reached the non-story OCs I decided to opt out of reading.
 * I was a little confused with the format when reading the Books and Story section. Try going over that to make it more streamline.
 * Personal preference: I like to see character/location lists as toggling boxes rather than a long list that you have to scroll by in its entirety. See MafiaTale for what I mean.
 * Lovely. Just lovely. An excellent alteration to the story.

I LOVE this page, and wish I had seen it sooner. I know my pick for next FA. I want to see more in the gallery, and am really interested in reading the books.

~The Second (talk) 12:46, November 21, 2016 (UTC)