Talk:Emmi/@comment-27775520-20160622070404

More professional con breaks down the door


 * Slam dunks review onto the table*

Writing: 4/10. (maybe a 5/10 but the lower one seems to make more sense) Its fine but some minor grammar mistakes could be found.

NOTE: '''Cons are rated in a way so the higher the rates are. the more bad the con is. so for the Genetic Scramble one, it was pretty bad.'''

Cons: Genetic Scramble: Usually Genetic scrambles lead to a bad thing, like autism. so uh... I'm rating this con 8/10 (I recommend checking some facts first)

Height, Strength, Sword: It just seems a bit. "Meh". I mean, a genetic scramble is usually a bad thing, and then training with a royal guard (Aka valkir but not listed in the page). And well. from a tiny temmie to a tall creature (aka 5,8 feet tall which to me seems a bit too tall. since height is usually effected in the mind). ANd just. that sword... its way to big and just seems like some fandom is leaking out... 9/10

Design: Its a meh to me. Super tall temmie on two legs. and over all. it looks like even a child could design it because of how simple it is to put a creature on leg's. and give them a similar design, so... 10/10 (Sorru Candeh)

Other: A temmie in the royal guard. and the back story seems a bit "Cliche" a little bit 6/10

Lines: it's just... meh 7/10

Pros: (This time the more higher the rate is. the better the pro is)

(Can't find any)

Final Words:

This is a "Meh" oc to me and needs a lot of work done on it... also dem stats tho... so i bid y'all do

Signed  Satan