Thread:II Finale II/@comment-26336673-20161121053908

Hey Finale!

First, I saw your story, and tbh, the beginning is a bit confusing. Who's Ted? What happened with Toriel (I know she lived, but still...)? I would expand upon that slightly. However, the story is actually really good, and beginning with the meeting with Sans, the story made sense. Great job!

Second, here's another OC for you: Barry.

First Arc: Barry is much like he was in the original: he watches Frisk throughout her journey from the beginning, and greets her in Hotland. He still gives her his phone number to call him anytime. His easy and laid-back behavior allows Frisk to trust him.

Second Arc: Barry became an active involvement in keeping the monsters with spirit. He offers himself to be their new leader, but they refuse out of fear that something terrible will happen to him too. However, everyone knew to trust him, and as a result, he became a serious target of Flowey.

Third Arc: Barry became the main fighter for the Against. He calls back monsters from the Support who were coerced. He is not a part of the Rebellion, but he saw to its founding, and regularly funded it. He tells Jerome to join them, and Jerome grudgingly accepts, on the condition that Jerome be left alone to his own devices. Barry is frequently targeted by Flowey, but he wards off every sabatoge. Barry joins the final fight against Flowey, where he delivers massive blows against the Support. No matter the ending, Barry survives. 