Talk:Rook/@comment-27707425-20160330041714/@comment-8464494-20160407071957

Oh, um well the best I can say to you is to always make things read like they are um... How do I put this? Alive. Like really the difference between what I do, at least structurally, and what a beginner does is that I add a sort of fluff you could say around the writing. For example, I could write "Rook went ice skating with Papyrus." And well, its there but really does not grab you. However, what I would do is something along the lines of, "With a jovial skip in his step and a flutter in his heart, Rook went to the frozen lake to ice skate with his beloved idol, the Great Papyrus." See? Already you take a sentance that, by itself did not really evoke much emotion or life, and now its suddenly a meaningful scene in of itself. Now don't gimme wrong, brevity in a sentence can be good if you want to evoke that sudden shift in tone, but generally speaking, this is what I do.