Talk:REDACTED TITLE/@comment-25726032-20170304143535

Alright, it's time for my second review. This time, my lovely variable will be a graded letter, like as if I was grading a test. Let's go!

Length/Completion/Format: A+, 10/10. The page is basically as complete as you can get, without making more entries or an actual UTRP format. The length is just right as well, in my own opinion. The best page lengths for me are always between 10000 and 20000 bytes, unless there's a thousand tabbers or something like that. The format however is unique on its own and very easily pays tribute to the SCP Foundation. Who knows, you could probably actually write an SCP too!

Design/Concept: A+, 10/10. While Skeletons were never the most original design for Undertale OCs, you took it to a brand new level. The design of REDACTED TITLE is amazing, and it reminds me of several giant skeleton bosses, like the one from Kubo, and from many other places! The personality is fitting for such a giant skeleton too, and its capabilities are actually rather modest. Overall, it's a great and original design for an Undertale OC.

Plot/Backstory: A+, 10/10. While the backstory can be quite demanding, it really pays off to be a unique one! The concept of there being another scientist before Gaster is definitely a good one, and the concept of the CORE actually being a containment center is quite genius. The current issue of REDACTED TITLE's power growing is also perfect for his introduction, as people will eventually have to deal with such a monstrosity. Overall, the backstory and premise is great!

Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation: A+, 10/10. While there has been a few errors before, they were corrected. I'll be lenient in this category, due to the fact that this page is supposed to be typed like an SCP page, not a normal page.

RP Applicability: D, 6/10. Ahhh, the one true flaw of REDACTED TITLE. While the OC is easily capable of carrying a plot on his own, the main issue is that he's too good at it. Whenever the OC appears, the RP will immediately change to focus itself on him. This flaw is apparent in other pages such as The Dark Corpse, Ress when in his true form, etc. But I can't blame you, you can't really fix this flaw without watering down his purpose until he's a shitty OC.

Overall, you have yourself a 92%, an A! This is a really great OC, and can easily become FA material in my opinion.