Talk:Emily/@comment-8464494-20160124234815

Hey, just wanted to welcome to the wiki and say that this OC, while pretty detailed, has a few flaws in my humble opinon. Now as the man behind Rook I can understand wanting your OC to have a personal connection with some of the canon characters, its only natural. But this whole, "is their cousin/sister/brother/ect" is well, is kinda a tired bad joke of fanfiction. Alot of people with no talent do that and it comes off as cringey. However you seem to have put alot of love into this character so I know you arn't someone without talent. My suggestion would be to make Emily a "Distant" cousin, something that people would find funny like "third cousin twice removed" and that shes from a far off land in the Underground and comes to visit her favorite obscure relatives every now and then.

Other than that, perhaps add a little more detail to say her items she carries around and her interactions with characters other than Sans, Papyrus, and the more "major" characters. For example, she seems to like sweets, so perhaps her and Nice Cream Man have some kind of aquaintance. Just a few more little detials that will make the OC come alive. All in all though, shes not bad for a first try OC, and I hope to see more from you in the future.