Talk:Lil Olpav Floqour/@comment-27775520-20160417090950

I like this oc, but as  Satan  i have come to judge. And what i have seen, is quite good, but nothing is perfect, because perfect is something nobody can really achieve, so lets start. First can you remove one of the storylines, i know the first one is fake but i got super confused when i read it. Also her father is a demon (Really...) And she is a shapeshifter. and yet they are listed as human. I think they should be known as "Human demon hybird Wolf shapeshifter" Because i am so confused. Also the hologram part is kind of stupid. You have to break the game to find her (Which is like finding gaster, which i guess it is cringy?) and after you burn the garden she's like "Ha, it is a hologram, i learned my tricks from my brother" Which you never stated they had one. Also why holograms... that is stupid. Also the genocide stats. Oh my god they are so op. "HP BOOST: 9999" I am not kidding... but over all goodish oc,  Satan  Rates 6/10 for effort, but 4 points are missing because some parts are kind of stupid and confusing, but the genocide stats are still op....

FINAL REVIEW STATE

Quality: 10/11                                                                                                                             Good Meter: 7/11                                                                                                                        Bad meter: 4/11                                                                                                                          Over all: 17/33                                                                                                                          Final  Satan  verdict: 1/11 Reason? Gaster blasters... Thats why

REWARD: Almost perfect oc! just some cliches overwelm the good parts, The over all meter is my choice, and if you feel offended by this in anyway then contact me on my page  Satan  <<< Page