Board Thread:Roleplaying/@comment-43779122-20191214010916/@comment-35757757-20191219031822

(None of this makes sense to me honestly XD

Ok now for me to be kinda brutally honest [warning opinions about your OC based on my knowledge of writing oooooo-]: It kinda feels like a kinda cheap attempt to basically dump sympathy onto Timber where it doesn’t make sense and doesn’t belong. Timber hasn’t really shown any of these traits [Hence the “Show, don’t tell” principle], and putting them in now will be a somewhat drastic change in character suddenly. It’s ok to have another character be more sympathetic, or at least get attention in the story. There can be more than one main character, and even then another character is allowed to get attention.

For an annoying personal thing: Please can Blue have this without Timber being shoved in because you seem to constantly want him to be the target of sympathy even when it’s at the point where another character will obviously get the sympathy due to being more likable, having it come more naturally, and deserve a bit more attention.

Also: I find it annoying that it seems you won’t let anything happen without Timber being involved and you try to shove him in where he doesn’t belong basically. It doesn’t feel natural}