Talk:Gavin/@comment-27311835-20170111194237

Well, i have some things i would like to critique. While this is not a bad character, there still are a few points that might need tweaking

Firstly, (this point is just my opinion) The "Come from outside the game" thing just aint my piece of cake, yet i understand why you like it and i really wouldnt want you to change it as it essentially defines this oc.

Secondly, Fighting alongside sans. i dont exactly like it.

Third, His face is tOO pUnChAbLe

Fourth, "using powerfull videogame attacks" it might be you worded it oddly but it sounds like he is summoning videogame characters like sonic etc.

Five,  I Advise people splitting the Descriptio into multipile parts although not nessesary i do appreciate having multipile subcategories i can easilly access to check some information, i would split them into Appearance, personality, abilities and weaknesses, although the last two would also fit quite well as their own standalone Category

Oh yeah, sixth, MEYMES

Overall i rate this 6.569/10