Thread:Espinozaan1/@comment-35757757-20200201031353/@comment-35757757-20200201033120

...mostly because it kinda addresses a problem I have with your characters...

They don't really have personalities, at least with Timber and Tisle.

You keep having them act in ways that contradict how they've already acted. You give them conflicting traits, making them both shy and timid yet at the same time they're supposed to be cool bad*sses. This isn't even a CMHB because you have them switch between the traits too often with no real explanation or inbetween. It's as if you want your characters to be cool bad*sses but also want them to be really sad to squeeze sympathy out of the audience and it just feels cheap and makes it impossible to really care about them because they don't feel like people. Real people have real personalities. I've especially noticed this with Tisle in that RP. You try to make him cool half the time, then have him suddenly being all sad and whatever without a real breaking point. He's supposed to be confident, but he's too sensitive for that to work. It's confusing, and just... doesn't feel right. Also: he basically acts the same way as Timber so he just feels like the same character. Personally, I'd recommend trying to split the traits between the two characters. Have one being the timid, shy, and sensitive one, and the other is the confident bad*ss. The traits are conflicting so they don't really work on the same character. Unless you have it be a tough guy facade, but you don't really seem to be writing that because it breaks too easily with no resistance. And it still doesn't solve the problem of the characters just feeling the same.

Sorry it's just a pet peeve and it's going to bother me forever unless it's dealt with XD