Thread:TheSecondEdgeOfTheBlade/@comment-31395005-20170529083942/@comment-25726032-20170531143005

I would suggest you add more nevertheless, so that you guarantee your page's survival. Here's some things you could do to make the page larger.


 * Be more in depth with the Personality and Appearance. You could quite possibly be more detailed with each of those aspects, which can each go up to at least 5 sentences. Make sure every detail of his personality and appearance are covered.


 * Add a Backstory section. One of the many ways to make the page bigger is by adding a backstory, which is usually necessary for many pages. Try to make it several paragraphs long, as longer backstories are usually better.


 * Add some more Trivia. There's probably more fun facts to him than one, so go crazy.

I suppose that's it for now. But I'd like to make a side-point that TECHNICALLY doesn't break the rules, but I personally find a problem. He has 9500 HP... which, if you were to compare to actual Undertale characters, is a LOT. For example, Asgore, the King of all Monsters, has a mere 3500 HP. All other characters in the game have much less than that, except for UTU and Mettaton NEO. I personally suggest you nerf down the HP to a more appropriate level, somewhere in the 1000-2000 range.